20090111

iii - has been edited since

in the eye of the dawn and the belly of night
sit in the ebb, fold to the tide
against the blue waves, we rose to the light

bodies in pure, water clings tight
formed to the board, quick on the ride
in the eye of the dawn and the belly of night

clung to our lips, fell down her height
salt in our eyes, the sun is our guide
against the blue waves, we rose to the light

flew on her crest, fell down her height
legs that would shake, dreams that were tried
in the eye of the dawn and the belly of night

by mother's song, reflections were bright
some giants slipped, drowned and then died
against the blue waves, we rose to the light

watched her at dusk, vast in her might
sand in our pores, land we denied
in the eye of the dawn and the belly of night
against the blue waves, we rose to the light

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

overall, its was good, liked the ending, i think it needs a little revision, but hey who am i to critisize